ext_107612 ([identity profile] servus-a-manu.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] abelina 2009-09-01 07:15 am (UTC)

This is really sweet. I like how you contrast their annoyance and affection with each other seamlessly thru the first half, then blend it into shared grief for the second. Their dialog in this piece is such a gentle exchange... like quick-moving water in a stream, fraught in some places with their mourning, but smoothing out to a clear illustration of their relationship in others. So good to know that they have each other!

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